Sunday, September 2, 2007

To Be Right - New and Improved.

I know many people who argue about minutia with their loved ones and determined that the basis is that we/they don't want to be the ones who are wrong about anything. I wrote this poem about it. It's not quite there, but who knows when I'll get it totally the way I want it.

PS I've updated the poem a bit more to reflect more what I wanted. See if you like it any better.

PPS. I worked on the poem a bit more. I think it's pretty much where I want it.

To Be Right
By Twist

Why do you argue when you know I'm right?
Don’t you know of my great insight?
Through many days I’ve toiled in strife
and gained much wisdom from daily life.
It’s not important what you do
because I’ve lived much longer than you.

You should listen to my counsel and not contest,
You can learn from me, my opinion’s best.
I’m not encumbered with all your fears,
My youthful strength will last for years.
I know you’re wrong and I am right,
You will be blessed by my young sight.

My womanly instincts give me great perception
To ensure in all that I have no deception.
Mother Nature and God are on my side,
I solve any problem in a single stride.
My feminine nature achieves great height.
You’ll always know that I am right.

As a man I’ve endeavored with all my might
to gain my knowledge and all my sight.
Nature has endowed me with strength and power,
To guide me in each troublesome hour.
It does not matter if you’re right all along
It matters most that I’m not wrong.

We sit each at last, alone in the dark,
Not even a dog is present to bark.
We’ve driven away every incorrect soul
With their lack of vision to see the whole.
Though no one's around to share our insight,
We have great pride in knowing that we were right.


Delirious said...

I think this is really good. I would switch places with the first and second stanzas so that it becomes the life progression of one person. IE: first stanza...the person is young...second old...last old and alone. :)

Twist's Tales said...

This was my trouble with why it's not finished yet. It's not the same person. I need to write more stanzas to have more types of people.

Nene said...

Is this about someone we all know and love - who can never be wrong?

Inside Stories said...

Someone we know and love immediately came to mind when I read this. :0)

Delirious said...

lol I was just going to ask who was your inspiration. :P